Do you like my song lyrics?

Wrote this song last night. Im only 15 so there could be sum mistakes. Its bout feelings i have for my ex. Do u rate the lyrics. Some advice plz

One Girl:

Walking down the street last night

When I came across a girl

She was a real nutter

With hair out of this world

Yet she caught me by surprise

I couldn閳ユ獩 sleep that night

I閳ユ獡 in over my head

Yes over my head

And I閳ユ獡 singing

There閳ユ獨 this one girl

And she dominates my world

Beautiful long blonde hair

Any excuse to stare

I wish could be mine

Oh all mine

She閳ユ獨 a touch immature at times

But man she is rather fine

Nice Body, Good personality

The whole package in one

Yeah, I閳ユ獓 stay up all night

Just to talk to her

And I閳ユ獡 singing

There閳ユ獨 this one girl

And she dominates my world

Beautiful long blonde hair

Any excuse to stare

I wish she could be mine

Oh all mine

(repeat chorus)

And as time comes to an end

I hope we are still friends

I閳ユ獓 hold your hand, sit next to you

You were the love of my life.

Do you like my song lyrics?

Aside from "nutter", you do well with language. The originality is also good. Keep it up.

Do you like my song lyrics?

try switching the word nutter other than that is it awesome

Do you like my song lyrics?

Nice Body, Good personality

The whole package in one

Yeah, I閳ユ獓 stay up all night

Just to talk to her

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Don't like that part, it doesn't got that ring to it, but other than that I'd say it's a great song

Do you like my song lyrics?

Which one is the chorus? And the hook? Sorry, I'm just a sucker for song structure. It's got a lot of feeling but not too much until it sounds like you're a heartbroken crooner.

Yes, get rid of the word nutter and 'but man' part.