hey yer ive always been interested in these kinda of gorey lyrics. i don't believe that it makes you more violent or ****** up its just a outlet for your anger and creativity. Heres some original lyrics i wrote for my band tell me what you think (ps its based off a real murder so tell if you no which one)
Covered with grass and purple weeds
You lay there strangled next to a pair of broken scissors
Puncture marks on your thighs
Genitals skinned
Clumps of hair cut away
Bizarre wounds reveal my playfulness
N閳ユ獨 carved into your wrists
As they drag your coffin past me
I stand here laughing and rubbing my hands
Joy runs through me
dont steal this **** or ill dislocate your brittle bones one by one
Dark, violent death metal gore lyrics?
I think you could do better. Your imagery is a little lackluster and your rhythm is choppy. Also your violence is vivid without being atmospheric, and "you" in the lyrics are lacking character. Add some subtlety and aim for disturbing rather then shocking. It'll get there.
ps. i dunno, which one?
Dark, violent death metal gore lyrics?
I wouldn't "steal" that - I'd run in the opposite direction!
You've got issues that far eclipse your lack of songwriting skills, my friend. Good luck.
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